And Then You Left

you came in, knocked and entered
there i lay, with my book in hand
said you, we must talk, and now
smiled i, and walked out of the room
sat you next to me, and said,
no, but whispered, to my ears
i must go now, i must leave
and, all i had was a smile..

i smiled and my eyes said it all,
and glad, you never noticed.
now i know, the dreams are gone,
what mine was now is his..
and you said, leaning on to me,
my dad found my match
and i must go by him..
again, all i had was a smile..

asked you for your last wish,
and i had no choice to grand..
you asked to make you mine,
for the moment, and once for all
hugged you, caressed you and said,
i respect,
the woman in you
and the man in him.
and then you left...

PS: Seems like i lost my touch with words, Satisfied not, but now its your say.
PPS: Kajal's post is the source..[link]

15 Shared Thoughts:

KParthasarathi said...

The last four lines touched me.Good ,Shravan

The Pink Orchid said...

what do I say Shravan? You have voiced someone's emotion so well.. a poem can be commented on..but how does one comment on emotions.. thanks for this poem buddy.. it hurts leaving a broken heart behind..but i see another heart broken too... a heart that is me..

deeps said...

Glad that you stopped by and it’s an honor.
The last time I came around here, you were in a confused, desperate mood..

However, reading this poem I get a different feeling altogether... don’t bother about the words in poems, but the emotions and feelings packed in it …
you have them loaded in it yaar ..

Hasna Fathima said...

taken away by the last four lines..

Mahesh Sindbandge said...

Hey it wasn't bad...in fact it had lot of sense...here and there a little confusion ..and the last four lines were very meaningful...:)

Shravan RN said...

@ KP Sir
i am so so so glad to see you here after so long. and i am glad that you liked the lines sir..

Shravan RN said...

@ Kajal
i knew you would come back, and you proved me right.. now what do i say to you kajal?

Shravan RN said...

@ Deeps
so glad to see you here brother, and now its my honour. and thank you for the appreciation.. that will motivate :)

Shravan RN said...

@ Hazna
:) thangyuuu

Shravan RN said...

@ Mahesh,
thanks for the appreciation mahesh, rightly said, it makes sense, confusions, thats my way of making people read :D lolz

cheers buddy

PULKIT said...

this was a masterpiece shravan!
loved it to the core of my heart :)

tc god bless!

Shravan said...

@ Pulkit
saw the comment yesterday,couldn't respond, sorry about that.. it comforted me to sleep well.. made the day at the last moment.. thanks mate :) see you after the trips !

Rhapsody B. said...

hmmmmmm......namaste, that's deep, sometimes eloquent words are not necessary, simple words at times convey the story, reaches its source and bounces high and low and far and wide.

Sometimes everything is lived in but a moment.


Shravan said...

@ Rhapsody
Hey, namasthe :) i agree simple words can say a story :) and thanks for the visit and for your valuable comment.


well expressed feelings...very touching...
except that there was a tiny winy confusion here and there..
anyways hats off..
good job..


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